Jasmine Hart

The best thing you can do is read poetry.Anthologies are great for introducing you to a range of forms. My favourite is "Being Alive", edited by Neil Astley. Then I'd ...

Maybe take a look at Samuel Taylor Coleridge's poem "Metrical Feet- A Lesson For A Boy".

Hi, Your imagery is lovely and this flows nicely. You manage the form really well and I especially like "Red smoked clouds". I'd change "ablaze" as it makes the line ...

Hi :) The emotion comes across really well here. I think the repetition of "You" in the first stanza works nicely. "Writh" should be "writhe". If you click "check spelling" ...

Hi, I love your structure and how you use different colours and fonts to mirror what you're saying. I'd change "warm" because it's hardly going to be cold heat from ...

Hi, I think you have a really inventive way of phrasing things. I especially love; "Your awkwardness burns like dry ice on skin. Your randomness turns the world upside down. ...

Hi, This is a beautiful piece. You follow the villanelle form nicely and it suits your subject matter. The opening imagery is lovely and I love; "but that's all in ...

Hi, The first line was powerful and made the reader want to read on. "Thrusting you in to numbness it runs through your veins" is great. I think the poem ...

Hi, This flows beautifully and your imagery is great. The opening lines instantly drew me in and I love "waxwork daughter", "tiny, pattering hush of snowflakes" and "insect hum of ...

Hi, welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here. This flows really nicely. I'd put a comma after "words" and "love". I'd change "step taken" because it's a little ...

Hey Matt, This is really interesting. I love "down and up" and I think "forever£ works really well. I'd move "middle" on to the second line and give; "I know ...

Haha! This was very clever. It made me smile. It's an unconventional haiku but I think it works really well. I think it works perfectly as it is. Thanks for ...

Hi, This is a lovely piece. It flows really nicely, the rhyme is very effective and you have some lovely imagery like; "Where we made edelweiss vines" and "And you ...

Hey Kit, I really enjoyed this. You handle the form beautifully. I think that the second half of the poem is stronger; the imagery is better and the character of ...

Hi, I think you've chosen a really good style for this and that it progresses nicely from beginning to end. It effectively lays out the situation and I think that ...